Lies, lies, lies
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(03-21-2014, 04:31 AM)Ryan_w_r Wrote:  A beautiful fallacy woven together with silken strings of white,
Neatly laid across your heart, and stitched on tight
A lovely little falsity, better yet, a lovely little fable...
Preying on the minds of the young, the weak, the ready willing and able.
a travesty believed to be a gift from his benevolent grace,
A chemical imbalance, an imperfection, a deceitful disgrace.
Do not be fooled by this malevolent waste,
Free yourself of these lies tight embrace.
This lie is a virus passed amongst society much like H.I.V.
Only the virus that I speak of is spelled L. O. V. E.

No meter, dramatic, bad end rhymes...  I know, I know..
I would rather compare the idea of “true” love to a religion than a virus.

because you can´t prove love doesn´t exist. it may or may not be a problem believing in it.

 

still like the words and the content of your poem because if I ignore the last two lines  it seems to me an accusation of a fake and romantic love picture.

but maybe this is arrogant of me, because if love is a feeling how could it be described as true or false. there is no true or false hate either. somehow hate is never questioned to be true.
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Lies, lies, lies - by Ryan_w_r - 03-21-2014, 04:31 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by Hermit - 03-21-2014, 07:22 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by Carousal - 03-24-2014, 08:20 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by NobodyNothing - 03-24-2014, 09:00 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by billy - 04-06-2014, 08:11 PM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by kindofahippy - 04-13-2014, 04:47 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by JakMak - 04-13-2014, 01:44 PM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by Ryan_w_r - 04-14-2014, 10:40 PM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by tectak - 04-16-2014, 06:35 PM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by Am I A Poet? - 04-18-2014, 11:14 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by Nbafan - 04-23-2014, 03:58 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by Gestalt222 - 04-23-2014, 07:21 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by vagabond - 11-19-2014, 04:51 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by Filíocht - 11-20-2014, 08:04 PM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by nb - 11-25-2014, 06:40 AM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by jsoutiere92 - 12-07-2014, 03:00 PM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by hestaredattheskyasiftoaskwhy - 01-23-2015, 11:17 PM
RE: Lies, lies, lies - by Rustymetal - 01-28-2015, 03:36 PM



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