Stark Contrast (was Stark) rev #4.

[aschueler]

Except for the last stanza, which I don't understand (the greater whole?), I liked it. 'Define the relief of the banks well' is smart.
If you end the poem at "hidden pond", even though you lose the line I admired above, I think the poem has a nice conclusion.
And...get rid of the unnecessary alliteration in the first line. It's ugly and does not belong here.

Thanks for the response.  I kind of liked the alliteration  .  However, I admit I was being cute.  I will re do that 1st line.

The end might be a different poem, but it fits somewhere.