11-01-2016, 01:37 PM
(10-27-2016, 12:01 AM)71degrees Wrote: There is no sadder song
than a two-lane highway
imagining lost loves standing Going with an earlier crit, I think the thought behind "imagining" is song enough, but then there is something about plain "imagining" that flatlines the piece -- both the rhythm and the repeat-gerund, maybe. Perhaps "spinning lost loves / on its soft shoulders."
on its soft shoulders.