Turkeys
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(12-18-2016, 05:37 PM)Wjames Wrote:  They’re salting the streets
to season the town
for the holidays. -- this line is a bit wane. I think you could eliminate it if you change the title, maybe to something like "Thanksgiving Turkey" or "Holiday Turkey" etc.
Other than that, I quite loved it. Thumbsup
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Turkeys - by Wjames - 12-18-2016, 05:37 PM
RE: Turkeys - by ellajam - 12-18-2016, 08:10 PM
RE: Turkeys - by Lizzie - 12-20-2016, 09:35 AM
RE: Turkeys - by Wjames - 12-23-2016, 07:12 AM
RE: Turkeys - by Sparkydashforth - 12-23-2016, 08:23 AM



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