Just a taste
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(12-14-2016, 01:34 PM)Merrikay Wrote:  sip of symphony
thirst undone
searing taste to
tepid trained tongue
palette muted
everything grey
transparent relief
opaque daze
It reads as you could be getting high on anything.  After I read the comments, I realized that it was a sexual experience.  After I got that, I went back to read again and came out with that you wanted it badly and finally experienced it with a person that had more experience than you, but that you didn't enjoy it as much as you thought.  I say that because of "transparent release" and "opaque daze".... just seems like you built it up in your mind and then it ended up not satisfying you.  That may or may not have been your intention with this one?  I do very much like it though. I keep going back to read it.  Please edit and so then we can read and re-read it again! Smile
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Just a taste - by Merrikay - 12-14-2016, 01:34 PM
RE: Just a taste - by rowens - 12-14-2016, 02:12 PM
RE: Just a taste - by Merrikay - 12-14-2016, 02:37 PM
RE: Just a taste - by rowens - 12-14-2016, 03:12 PM
RE: Just a taste - by Merrikay - 12-14-2016, 03:24 PM
RE: Just a taste - by rowens - 12-14-2016, 03:32 PM
RE: Just a taste - by MadelineAnne - 01-10-2017, 03:20 AM
RE: Just a taste - by Merrikay - 12-14-2016, 03:45 PM
RE: Just a taste - by Coquette16 - 01-03-2017, 07:10 AM
RE: Just a taste - by HopeVictoria56 - 01-10-2017, 11:46 AM
RE: Just a taste - by j56 - 01-20-2017, 08:48 PM
RE: Just a taste - by Myotis - 01-22-2017, 01:59 PM
RE: Just a taste - by Merrikay - 02-26-2017, 09:24 AM



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