Wind Fantasy - edit2, title change

[dukealien]

At risk of being that person, I actually like the original title more, Wind Passes. I agree that knowledge and common sense of the current world is a must, but we don't need to be so politically correct all the time either. Wind Flutters just makes it sound too fluffy and less serious. "Passes" could mean many different things, not just the literal passing of wind.

Another disagreement, I like manacle and particle rhyming together. It's something different, original. In my opinion, a forced rhyme is worse than a weak/off rhyme. Isn't that what makes it unique?

Edit1

Wind Flutters



Who has a thing to say about the wind?
To old-time sailors pressing, shifting force; Maybe "the" instead of "to". Would make wind a more focused subject, I think.
it made excuse for lovers who had sinned I would like to use the plural form of "excuse" instead.
then called each other feathers blown off-course. Maybe a grammar error? "other's feather" sounds better for me, but maybe I've been  saying  it wrong all this time.
Today our culture sees gas particles
with wind their average speed, direction, scents,
arrests its gusts in windmill manacles
to power cities’ grid-establishments.          Could maybe rewrite the order of items in this long sentence as well. Shift clauses around, even. Just seems stuttery to me when I read it. 
But wind’s inconstant, fleeting as desire -
what moves us to prefer its fickle flow
to take the place of coal’s pent saffron fire,
a heady rush displacing steady glow?
We’ll have our breezy flutter but return   Breezy sounds a little/slightly childish here. But it's fine if you still leave it in too, for me.
with time to coal, and constancy’s long burn.

@bluepressure - Catching up on critiques here.  Some good suggestions you have:  L2, for example could be

An old-time sailor's shifting, driving force,

ending with a comma to weld the thought onto the rest of the sentence better.  Trying to avoid "the" except as a place-holder in first drafts, and where (once per poem?) it has impact stressing uniqueness.

Your other suggestions also lead in improving directions.  Thanks for the read!