The Feeling of life

[Richard]

Hey spiritthebrave,
I like the ideas you express here. I would just suggest expressing them a bit more abstractly. I'll go into more detail below:

To feel is to live
to touch, and be touched by others
to experience
to be struck by reality -I feel like you should add a metaphor or simile here. Say something like "to be struck by reality is like..."
and be present
for our feelings inspire actions
and actions can only be executed in the moment
this moment -May be add another metaphor here, or even personify the moment in some way. You could say something like, "this moment, begging for your touch," or something like that.
the moment you felt your heart beat once again

Forgive me if my suggestions are too much for basic critique, but I feel like you have some good ideas here and you just need to express them a bit differently.

Keep writing,
Richard