06-30-2017, 05:04 AM
(06-30-2017, 04:39 AM)The Four-Eyed Cat Wrote:thanx for your comment! was thinking about removing all punktuation but the 2nd line needs the question mark i think.(06-30-2017, 04:18 AM)vagabond Wrote: comaInteresting read, I really love the first two lines as they make for a great statement - is maintaing someone in a coma really the best thing the medical world can do?
life saved: an art, Perhaps make life plural?
maintained: a grace? drop the question mark to add more strength to the the statement
turned a wraith. alternatively you can change the first line into a question.
hope remains,
the drip sustains. Are you referring to an IV with this ? yes
more time to fade.
locked in dreams,
what do they mean?
lost, it seems.
Thanks for sharing, Vaga!