07-25-2017, 12:43 PM
Hey,
Really new to reading, writing or commenting on the poem. So here is what I think:
She hid within the limbs
piled high behind the old shed
where dad made bird houses
and paperweights. <--- I think this 4th line could use a couple more words, so it feels more.. complete
After nine months, she emerged
looking as haggard and torn up as a fetus <--
strip mined for its stem cells.
Got me wondering for a moment why would a fetus look haggard, then I read and understood the next line and it made sense.
We were glad
she kept the baby. <--- Liked this line
Really new to reading, writing or commenting on the poem. So here is what I think:
She hid within the limbs
piled high behind the old shed
where dad made bird houses
and paperweights. <--- I think this 4th line could use a couple more words, so it feels more.. complete
After nine months, she emerged
looking as haggard and torn up as a fetus <--
strip mined for its stem cells.
Got me wondering for a moment why would a fetus look haggard, then I read and understood the next line and it made sense.
We were glad
she kept the baby. <--- Liked this line