The Feeling of life
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(06-26-2017, 02:38 PM)spiritthebrave Wrote:  To feel is to live - To feel is such a broad topic, I'd love for the poem to be longer, for you to touch more on what it means to feel. 
to touch, and be touched by others
to experience
to be struck by reality
and be present
for our feelings inspire actions
and actions can only be executed in the moment
this moment
the moment you felt your heart beat once again - Perhaps "feel" rather than "felt" since you used that in the first line. It'll give repetition and closure to the poem.
Reminds me of the medical field. Nursing specifically. There can be so much intensity and feeling packed into one moment. It's kinda hard to describe it, but that's what life is. Indescribable moments. I'd love to see more of how you try to describe that moment.
I've always wanted to live in a world where it's okay to pronounce both L's in my name.
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The Feeling of life - by spiritthebrave - 06-26-2017, 02:38 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by ellajam - 06-26-2017, 07:16 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by Richard - 06-27-2017, 11:29 AM
RE: The Feeling of life - by theyellowfog - 06-28-2017, 12:57 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by Voodoogirl - 06-29-2017, 09:21 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by Jokers Wild - 06-30-2017, 02:17 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by typing mantis - 07-02-2017, 08:33 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by Pat Doiron - 07-18-2017, 06:08 AM
RE: The Feeling of life - by Wright - 07-26-2017, 11:49 AM
RE: The Feeling of life - by PenPCB - 07-28-2017, 01:50 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by billy - 07-30-2017, 12:36 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by fuzzyllama1 - 08-02-2017, 01:26 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by Thunderembargo - 08-03-2017, 12:17 AM
RE: The Feeling of life - by hanumang108 - 08-07-2017, 06:24 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by alonso ramoran - 08-14-2017, 03:08 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by DS85 - 08-15-2017, 03:00 AM
RE: The Feeling of life - by FledglingTroubadour - 08-15-2017, 05:27 PM
RE: The Feeling of life - by milo - 08-16-2017, 07:19 AM



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