10-12-2017, 09:27 PM
Hey Rose,
Welcome to the site. Thanks for the feedback. I like your point about the practiced smile, but I ended up going in a bit of a different direction with this poem in the first edit. shemthepenman's comments really got me rethinking about what I wanted to say here. I started to feel like I was being too vague in the original, so I ended up doing a drastic edit.
Thanks again,
Richard
Welcome to the site. Thanks for the feedback. I like your point about the practiced smile, but I ended up going in a bit of a different direction with this poem in the first edit. shemthepenman's comments really got me rethinking about what I wanted to say here. I started to feel like I was being too vague in the original, so I ended up doing a drastic edit.
Thanks again,
Richard
Time is the best editor.