10-14-2017, 02:57 AM
[quote="Richard" pid='234556' dateline='1507677690']
First Edit:
Winter Storm
Clouds grey as my brain,
the first snow descends like unwanted thoughts. <- I loved this Stanza Started this poem on a rocket ship
I discovered years ago that dormant grass
is best covered before it's trampled <- This story your telling is appearing in my mind
by oblivious feet.
Tomorrow, the roads will be closed.
I'll wear my practiced smile
while you cook breakfast and hum Christmas carols. <- Ending this perfectly making me understand everything you summarized the storm that actually going on
Wowwwwwww The changes here were pretty great I didn't really like the original much
First Edit:
Winter Storm
Clouds grey as my brain,
the first snow descends like unwanted thoughts. <- I loved this Stanza Started this poem on a rocket ship
I discovered years ago that dormant grass
is best covered before it's trampled <- This story your telling is appearing in my mind
by oblivious feet.
Tomorrow, the roads will be closed.
I'll wear my practiced smile
while you cook breakfast and hum Christmas carols. <- Ending this perfectly making me understand everything you summarized the storm that actually going on
Wowwwwwww The changes here were pretty great I didn't really like the original much