02-03-2018, 10:17 PM
(02-03-2018, 03:40 AM)Wjames Wrote: O rusted lantern clanging shield rockBeautifully visual. Every sentence leads on to the next seamlessly, with meanings changing just a tiny bit as the added phrases kick in. I can't suggest any changes here at all.
as I stumble drunk through juniper
toward my cabin at the shore,
luminous and breaking like waves
struck by moon, when will we dissolve?