Mijo (edit 3)

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are you angry or only serious?

You've got a lot of great feedback on this already, especially in terms of making it more succinct/direct... the ending is the poignant part, for me anyway. If I look at the poem through a critical lens, I guess I wonder if the details included are the right details, is it the beard? the Olympus?  It is effectual as is though. Thanks for sharing

Thanks Miley both for the suggestions and the clarification on what Rowens was saying.  Seems obvious now, but....well, it wasn't to me.

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Where else?

If Miley got it, not sure why I didn't.  Anyways, I'll make that change.