08-24-2023, 02:37 PM 
	
	
	
		I also am missing the moon  
It was such a clever element, so sad to see it go.
P.S. I understand that you're hinting at the moon, but it's not clear enough IMO. You're gaining multiplicity of possible meaning, but....at a cost.
P.P.S. I see both sides. At the very least, you can take comfort that it's a good poem either way.
	
	
	

It was such a clever element, so sad to see it go.
P.S. I understand that you're hinting at the moon, but it's not clear enough IMO. You're gaining multiplicity of possible meaning, but....at a cost.
P.P.S. I see both sides. At the very least, you can take comfort that it's a good poem either way.

 

 
