Ruminations on the Sea(more tweaks)
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I also am missing the moon  Sad
It was such a clever element, so sad to see it go. 

P.S. I understand that you're hinting at the moon, but it's not clear enough IMO. You're gaining multiplicity of possible meaning, but....at a cost.
P.P.S. I see both sides. At the very least, you can take comfort that it's a good poem either way.
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RE: Ruminations from the shore - by brynmawr1 - 08-11-2023, 05:30 AM
RE: Ruminations from the shore - by Mark A Becker - 08-11-2023, 05:43 AM
RE: Ruminations from the shore - by brynmawr1 - 08-11-2023, 06:29 AM
RE: Ruminations from the shore - by Lizzie - 08-11-2023, 06:24 AM
RE: Ruminations from the shore - by brynmawr1 - 08-12-2023, 05:59 AM
RE: Ruminations on the Sea(new title) - by busker - 08-11-2023, 09:46 AM
RE: Ruminations on the Sea(new title) - by rowens - 08-12-2023, 06:16 AM
RE: Ruminations on the Sea(new title) - by rowens - 08-13-2023, 12:27 PM
RE: Ruminations on the Sea(tweaks) - by brynmawr1 - 08-21-2023, 05:09 AM
RE: Ruminations on the Sea(tweaks) - by rowens - 08-22-2023, 02:11 AM
RE: Ruminations on the Sea(tweaks) - by Lizzie - 08-24-2023, 02:37 PM
RE: Ruminations on the Sea(tweaks) - by brynmawr1 - 08-26-2023, 12:49 AM



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