Ruminations on the Sea(more tweaks)

[brynmawr1]

I also am missing the moon 
It was such a clever element, so sad to see it go. 

P.S. I understand that you're hinting at the moon, but it's not clear enough IMO. You're gaining multiplicity of possible meaning, but....at a cost.
P.P.S. I see both sides. At the very least, you can take comfort that it's a good poem either way.

Hi Lizzie,
Thanks for commenting again.  Yes, there are pros and cons but I have decided to put Moon back in as I think the reader will like the payout better.   Made some other minor word changes but ended up leaving the last stanza pretty much intact.  Maybe I'll come back to later, maybe not.
steve