Never There - edit2

[dukealien]

edit2;

Never There (Surreal AI)


Irrelevancies fade
leaving a driftwood cabin
by sunny seas
a little evening fog
black nights crowded
with cool stars too far away
to bother.

Endless white sand
found crab claw the means
to compose and draw;
bare feet smoothing salty grains
erase each verse
as it’s committed.

Inside sea-glass windows
desiccated by dry wind
a rippled book of psalms
or three-view plans
with dimensions grown
irrelevant from long disuse
pages scuffed
brown faded ink.

But now no keyword strings recall
that soft-addictive vision space
its shore of no return
to whispered peace.

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Thanks to all critics new and previous.  I had this pared down more than the above, then added some more inspired by @wasellajam's comments including an enhanced title to do some work.

  The tailpiece is no longer quite true:  I did find that elusive YouTube™ video again.  It's not as good as I remembered - pitched squarely at the older set (member of which I don't *quite* consider myself).  Prompt with "surreal house that waited for us" .  There's a style in all these high-end AI videos, what would you call it, Techno-Baroque?  with masses of detail that are almost photo-realistic but not quite there.  In the video, sizes of people and houses are out of proportion and some of the houses don't make sense, realistically.  But check at 8:52 - there's a well-dressed geezer whose house is a classic Airstream trailer through the windows of which you can see it's entirely filled with a beautifully appointed bar.  My kinda guy.