About a Girl

About a Girl

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#11

07-18-2012, 08:45 PM

@Todd

Thanks a lot for your feedback, I appreciate it. I'll consider what you've said for my edit.

"which doctors prescribed" - - - "witch doctors prescribed"

That is why I left which in there. Maybe that is simply too ineffective though.

When I do an edit I'll repost in serious crit :3

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About a Girl - by Universalchild - 07-12-2012, 07:11 AM

RE: About a Girl - by penguin - 07-13-2012, 05:14 AM

RE: About a Girl - by billy - 07-13-2012, 10:54 AM

RE: About a Girl - by Philatone - 07-14-2012, 03:47 AM

RE: About a Girl - by Universalchild - 07-16-2012, 05:32 AM

RE: About a Girl - by billy - 07-16-2012, 12:02 PM

RE: About a Girl - by Timmycom - 07-18-2012, 02:46 AM

RE: About a Girl - by Paddygirl - 07-18-2012, 12:15 PM

RE: About a Girl - by Universalchild - 07-18-2012, 06:05 PM

RE: About a Girl - by Todd - 07-18-2012, 07:45 PM

RE: About a Girl - by Universalchild - 07-18-2012, 08:45 PM

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