My Last Walk by Keith

[Leanne]

As I stepped off the building,
the world turned through 90 degrees
and I strolled past neighbours windows,
looking down inside their rooms
warm, bright, family life behind glass.

Vibrant with activity, sit down meals,
office workers greeted with kisses,
children fighting over the tv remote,
dog stretched out in front of the fire,
siblings giggling with bath time bubbles,
passionate couples arguing over nothing,
bodies showering away the days grime,
dad wrestling with three little monsters,
a lady near the ground floor even waved.

As I stepped onto the pavement
I said “my world isn’t too bad”
But I was walking faster than I thought.

I left the note under a rock,
so it didn’t blow away.


*The original thread and comments can be found here

[billy]

i remember liking the humour i saw in this one well done kieth

and well done to leanne for picking some good one's out

[Magpie]

Glad to see that this is here, excellent poem.

[milo]

yah, this is quite good. I remember reading this the first time and then getting to the end and I was like "oh" and then I read it again.

[Keith]

Many thanks to all for your kind comments and a big thank you to Leanne for picking it out, I never thought I would have anything worthy of this section of the site so this is a really big thing for me. Thank you TOMH

[Leanne]

I had missed this one in the commenting rounds -- but it stands out as unique and beautifully realised, a very professional poem.

[cidermaid]

TOMH as your official and biggest fan and covert stalker - congrats on making it to the Hogs section. Well deserved.
AJ.

[Keith]

TOMH as your official and biggest fan and covert stalker - congrats on making it to the Hogs section. Well deserved.
AJ.

AJ you are too kind, I wish I could support your posts with half the quality of feedback you continue to support us all with. Many thanks Keith.

[tectak]

As I stepped off the building,
the world turned through 90 degrees
and I strolled past neighbours windows,
looking down inside their rooms
warm, bright, family life behind glass.

Vibrant with activity, sit down meals,
office workers greeted with kisses,
children fighting over the tv remote,
dog stretched out in front of the fire,
siblings giggling with bath time bubbles,
passionate couples arguing over nothing,
bodies showering away the days grime,
dad wrestling with three little monsters,
a lady near the ground floor even waved.

As I stepped onto the pavement
I said “my world isn’t too bad”
But I was walking faster than I thought.

I left the note under a rock,
so it didn’t blow away.


*The original thread and comments can be found here

Worthy TOMH.
This one is up there. Good egg.
Best,
tectak

[ChristopherSea]

Another stroll through the spotlights: This one is a real concrete smash for me! Humorous, ironic and effective. Well done Tom!

[TheWall0912]

Didn't get a chance to read this until it was posted in the spotlight because it was before my time on here. I've read this through well over ten times, each time not being able to come up with a way to represent my appreciation with words. Still can't, but I want to comment anyway. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, each time I did. It is beautifully written. Thank you so much for the read.