Off sick-- edit 2
#21
The ending really seems to...just stick it. I like it a lot.
On my first read, I thought the speaker was crying uncontrollably and went through a whole box of tissues. Now I'm not sure if she in fact has a cold. I'm think the fact that "scorching days are far from here" means she's physically cold. IDK.

Giant cotton popcorn is hilarious.

Thanks for the read Smile
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#22
A little late on this line but could also have used:

Of which my sisters would eat
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#23
Thanks Pinsir and Blake for the comments.

I didn't mean for the speaker to be crying Pinsir, but maybe she's off sick due to heartsickness, who knows. ;p
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