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		Rules: Write a poem for national poetry month on the topic or form described. Each poem should appear as a separate reply to this thread. The goal is to, at the end of the month have written 30 poems for National Poetry Month. 
 
 Topic 08: Write a poem inspired by a place you have lived or inspired by a place you have wanted to live.
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		The Ice Palace
 A great network of cloth and couch inside the sheer ice-walls,
 cold, opaque, beyond the limits of interaction. This is my Hell.
 (Hell need not be an evil place, my darling.
 By Hell I mean Heaven, my Heaven,
 one without camp little angels playing Jim Reeves tunes on harps.)
 
 Anywhere a little bit claustrophobic would perform just as well, however;
 a bedroom overlooking an alleyway
 so I can lay awake at night in the warm and light
 and think: I'm in here, cosy as the grave, and they're out there,
 Death and the tramps having sex in the bins...
 
 (Death, after all, is a bit of a pervert,
 comin' over 'ere, takin' us by surprise, just like the bloody immig'ants...)
 The Ice Palace is that place in my dreams where I imagine myself
 while sitting in bars or at family functions,
 pretending to be healthy, serene, and still fully human.
 
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
 
		
	 
	
	
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		The house of woman is old and weathered,its wooden walls set on the edge of the sands
 above a spill of bright yellow lupins.
 A woman stands in the doorway, sweeping
 the sand of forgetting away from her feet.
 Behind her, swathes of violets, dark blue,
 their soft tide of perfume washing the air.
 A white blossom flares in a very small sunbeam,
 chimes and curtains shake out on the wind
 and hands swift as sparrows tear at the bark
 for the crimson secret that keeps breasts pure
 as burning snow. The ghost of a crescent moon
 holds nothing between its horns but the path
 to the house of woman.
 
 
 
 after Robin Hyde
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		04-08-2016, 03:41 PM 
(This post was last modified: 04-08-2016, 10:53 PM by Todd.)
	
	 
		Further Up, Further In
 
 I tried to walk through the gleam
 of the butcher’s knife,
 past the cold necessity of murder.
 My feet crunching through
 the broken dishes
 through a hundred years
 of winter, past the lamp post,
 to stand between the pieces
 of the broken table,
 release frosted breath
 I didn’t know I held, and demand
 death walk backwards.
 
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		The Pennines.
 
 As waves of rolling heather swamp the peaty moor,
 purple headed stems whip and whisper to the north.
 
 Waterfowl alight and skim on windy waters,
 as rippled mirrors hold a thousand golden suns.
 
 A Kitty Hawk that wheels on wing before its dives;
 A shrieking shrew succumbs, a squeak or two then death.
 
 There's life and death to rival one of Shakespeare's plays
 on this moorland stage of reeds and austere crags
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Very, very nice Billy 
@ todd - Dam, not a single duff offering.  All equally impressive. (jealous much    ).
	
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		thanks AJ, it's getting harder to keep up   
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		04-08-2016, 09:12 PM 
(This post was last modified: 04-08-2016, 09:15 PM by RiverNotch.)
	
	 
		Man, that's beautiful Billy. But now I feel sick with jealousy, thinking about them moors -- well, mostly how the scenery comes close in its own way to the scenery of the nature-walks here, but without the heat. But wow -- I mean, if it isn't so hot here right now, I'd be practically in the moors with that.
 MEMORY RECLAIMED
 
 a memory a film
 viewed once, eventually excitement
 loud action, hero
 slaying dragon
 or princess opening sex
 drowned out, as always,
 in favor of the little things
 
 the children -- perhaps the sun
 setting red in the horizon,
 dramatic string section
 hanging chords -- cut to night
 
 red firelight
 on the deep in contemplation face,
 a young voice, his words in the quiet like
 "should I heed? should I heed?"
 
 and smells of sage on rafter, thickening
 moss on wood, bed of furs
 beginning to foul, sour wine --
 
 my son my younger self, we heed now
 sitting here, locked
 in illusion
 now let me enjoy my pipe
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Last Try for Home
 Crawling toward home
 I make it only
 as far as the landing
 where I see the Ark
 near ready to embark
 
 I drag my bloody knees
 a few yards further and lift
 a hand too weak to wave
 
 and some kind soul
 comes down the ramp
 gathers me up and helps me board.
 
 That old tale of two by two
 was another story.
 This time whoever gets this far
 can go wherever
 we're going. Oh
 
 let it be the land
 the dove finds
 with olive groves
 full grown and bearing.
 
 This labor needs its birth,
 this long travail, its earth
 of fruit and freedom.
 
 I sleep now
 and will not wake
 til landfall.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		great to see bedeep and everyone else sticking the course. don't forget to play catchup if you miss one   
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		This was more challenging than the previous ones for some reason. I should polish the first half of that but I'll do that another day.  
*rubs hands together*
 
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		Down this windy road of cracks and holesand many pit stops is a run down home
 lush with smiles and holy stones thrown,
 they say experience reaps,
 but in here it sows
 superior thinks looking down is up
 and no matter the path the road hits ruts
 and nails of rust and bumps that jut,
 any vehicle that crosses put
 demons in their view
 posing as great spirits
 are stuck in their tomb
 no matter the view
 the plan goes askew
 but whenever you ask,
 they'll say it's you.
 
Crit away
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Home for me is a hill top view.Mist filled valleys
 and distant  minor mountains
 divert my eyes from the M5 to linger,
 searching for the school clock tower,
 tucked behind the mauve mounds
 of Malvern.
 
 I don’t know how or why,
 but each county has a unique tell;
 a feel, a smell.
 It is that intangible
 something that you miss.
 A certain “homeness” sensation
 that can never be sent in a care package,
 like a favourite brand of tea.
 
 My part of Dartmoor
 is softer, more rounded.
 The soil smells cleaner;
 less earthy somehow.
 Bluebells and dog roses
 and a thousand other flowers
 fill the spaces in between
 my home hills and here
 and after fifteen years
 I think the view
 from the top of the hill
 looks right.
 
 
 rough bones of a poem only - Found this a hard prompt.
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Under the up and over door
 We built the garage without cigarettes,
 it still has the bruises.
 The fluorescent tube is blackened
 but it coughs loud enough
 to send spiders checking corners.
 I twirl a finger on the worn down vice
 It shudders through rust,
 sets my teeth on edge.
 
 I'm not sure what it is.
 There’s a layer of dad on these walls,
 concrete under the paint.
 I shake a few old spray cans,
 ball bearings ride the empty insides
 motor bikes on the wall of death,
 pilot goggles and a piss pot helmet.
 There’s a layer of me too,
 a scrawny bit dipped in grease
 split fingered and blood blistered.
 
 Its not about the smell either,
 cooked engine oil and turpentine.
 To look at it its nothing but relegated
 MFI draws and cut down Formica work tops,
 nails in jam jars and extra strong mint tins.
 
 No, it’s not about any of that.
 It’s about craftsmanship, taking care
 the penciled scope and scaled up repair
 the weight and balance, air and brush,
 handmade projects, screwed
 and bolted, glued and tacked,
 a chiseled rose on gold leaf thorns.
 All metal filings on my memories
 that glint each time the door goes up.
 Yes that’s it,
 that's what I see when I'm able to look.
 
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Wonderful, Keith.  There is a true note being struck.  "There’s a layer of dad on these walls" - I know exactly what you say.  There is gold in this mine.   
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Keith that's really wonderful. Thank you for it.
	 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Damn Keith, that was amazing
	 
Crit away
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		The Gold Coast
 Salted sands of shining hue,
 warm beneath the bronzing glow,
 all tranquil is the shushing blue,
 where dreams are born and left to grow –
 among the gleaming ebb and flow
 of smiles and splendid stories told
 by those whose job it is to know:
 the glitter city spreads its gold.
 
 Add plastic glamour to the brew,
 sit back and watch the polished show,
 while parti-coloured troubles stew
 inside the gilded portmanteau
 that tourists carry when they go
 back to their sordid lives and old
 existence while, amid the woe,
 the glitter city spreads its gold.
 
 Beyond the aura bright, a few
 avoid the lure of ethics low,
 and from their mouths the Scriptures spew,
 while at the mass of sin they throw
 dire warnings, like the cawing crow;
 stark right to moral breasts they hold,
 yet in the seething undertow,
 the glitter city spreads its gold.
 
 In black and white, the to and fro
 ensures the Coast is never cold –
 so while the shallow breezes blow,
 the glitter city spreads its gold.
 
It could be worse
 
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Stunning, Leanne, and by that I mean stunningly good.   
		
	 
	
	
	
		
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		Leanne: A pleasure to actually read out loud. I loved the sonics.
	 
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