loaf on a box
#1
Loaf on a box

Cat likes pizza box
for his bed
assumes loaf position


dale


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#2
Smile Smile
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#3
I don't have a cat, so this'll have to do:
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#4
similar principle, except yours is lion.



dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

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#5
love it.

we have three cats in this house and they love any cardboard box.

(08-16-2016, 05:51 AM)Erthona Wrote:  Loaf on a box

Cat likes pizza box
for his bed
assumes loaf position


dale


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#6
What is the draw about cardboard? Must be imbued with cat magic. Thumbsup




dale
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#7
oh please
a stack of pillows
or pile of laundry
they'll flop anywhere
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#8
It's true, if handy, those things
they'll put they're rump on,
but for cardboard, ooh for cardboard,
from miles, away, they'll come.


dale
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The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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(08-17-2016, 04:51 AM)Erthona Wrote:  What is the draw about cardboard? Must be imbued with cat magic. Thumbsup




dale

I have two cats, and they are terrified of boxes.
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#10
Obviously dogs in disguise Smile


dale
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#11
Love this!

I read in this thread that you're not supposed to interpret what you see (you speculate about what the cat likes). Granted, he probably doesn't do it if he doesn't like it, especially given the self-absorption of those cuddly kitties, but it would probably be a stronger piece if you cut "likes."

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#12
I've noticed that people say many things, most without giving what they say much thought Big Grin

People also say do not generalize, but human beings in groups, by and large tend to follow large patterns. So while it is nearly impossible to predict or say anything specific about an individual without knowing them, the opposite is true with large groups. Taken as a given that a person is rational and not motivated by bias, generalization can be quite accurate. If this were not true, TV would not be supported by advertisement.



dale
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The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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#13
A very fun image :-)  Is this meant to be a haiku or just a short poem? If a haiku, then I would say that it sounds closer to a run on sentence than a haiku with separate fragment and phrase to my ears. If just a short poem, ignore this completely :-)
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#14
justlikeyou,

I don't write American Haiku, but I would think that should be obvious from the lack of form. Punctuated and put in proper sentence form it would read.

Cat likes pizza box for his bed.
(He)Assumes (the)loaf position.

But that was not my intention.

My intention was to create an image using the fewest words possibly and still convey all I wished to convey.

Thanks for reading and commenting,

Best,

dale
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entwife,

Yeah, you're the first one to mention that Smile

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