Turkeys
#1
They’re salting the streets
to season the town
for the holidays.
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#2
mmm, I can relate, nicely done.
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(12-18-2016, 05:37 PM)Wjames Wrote:  They’re salting the streets
to season the town
for the holidays. -- this line is a bit wane. I think you could eliminate it if you change the title, maybe to something like "Thanksgiving Turkey" or "Holiday Turkey" etc.

Other than that, I quite loved it. Thumbsup
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#4
Thanks for reading.

I get what you're saying about the last line Liz, but I like the title as it is.

It's both a very childish insult to the people who say to salt the streets, and a common holiday meal.
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#5
Nice. I've been seasoning a cast iron skillet today,
so this rung festive bells, sort of.




(12-18-2016, 05:37 PM)Wjames Wrote:  They’re salting the streets
to season the town
for the holidays.
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