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		Words ruin this
silence
bloodsoaked
pain immortalized
on faces.
Endure, march
over their graves
But that won't fix this-
this perfect tragedy.
	
	
	
	
		
	
 
 
	
	
	
		
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		 (01-28-2023, 06:10 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  Words ruin this
silence
bloodsoaked
pain immortalized
on faces.
Endure, march
over their graves
But that won't fix this-
this perfect tragedy.
Hi slicer-not sure what event you're referring to on 1/27.  That said, I really like the opening line.  Not sure that second person 'you' is working for such a personal observation, though.  As you can see, above, I took liberties...
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		Thanks Mark. This poem was made in regard to the holocaust. I had never written on it.