Singing Solo

[Mark A Becker]

Singing Solo

She knows her solo well-
the rise, and fall
of each passage.

A lighter touch here,
more forceful there,
her contralto, legato

as she steadily builds
her crescendo, holding
a sustained vibrato.

Then, the sweet deep
release, to the sound
of one hand clapping.

[Wjames]

Enjoyed reading it, Mark, nice line breaks and exploration of self-pleasure - the final clapping image is quite funny.

[matsunosuperfan]

Singing Solo

She knows her solo well-
the rise, and fall
of each passage.

A lighter touch here,
more forceful there,
her contralto, legato

as she steadily builds
her crescendo, holding
a sustained vibrato.

Then, the sweet deep
release, to the sound
of one hand clapping.

sensitive... then hilarious. nice

don't think you need the comma after "the rise"

[matsunosuperfan]

revisiting this - it's nice how clean the poem is, but we could use more movement. the middle two stanzas basically are just a list of musical terms. the closing gesture I still think is really strong and provocative. it deserves better setup.

maybe the speaker could disclose just a smidge more context about the subject? although, it's kind of effective how "she" is just like, the embodiment of One Singing and little else. hmm.