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Dedicated to those killed or injured in the Boston Marathon
Hatred pulls the lips downward into
a smile that never reaches the eyes.
A pressure cooker packed with malice;
its timer ticking.
Shrapnel spewed from a ruthless mind
into a crowd of astonishment.
Shards propelled without warning
Lives exploding in a puff of smoke.
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Hi Heart,
I like this poem very much. Only eight lines, and still much is expressed.
The image in first two lines was beautifully conveyed, and I felt the sentiment of the poem right away.
Also, I liked the alliterations. Especially L4, creating in itself, a sense of ticking.
Thanks for the read
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Hi Volaticus , thank you for commenting and your opinion. Not the most uplifting piece of course, but a gut reaction the that tragic obscenity.
Heart
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I think the people of Boston would appreciate this dedication.
I loved lines 5-6.
Beautiful poem.
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(05-09-2013, 07:05 AM)KICKBACK Wrote: I think the people of Boston would appreciate this dedication.
I loved lines 5-6.
Beautiful poem.
Thanks KICKBACK. As I said, this was an outlet for my disgust following this horrific event.
Crazy people that use crude violence give other crazy people a bad reputation.
But these guys didn't seem crazy before. That one guy had a decent looking girl that converted to Islam for him.
I can't even get a Christian girl to convert to Christianity for me.
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(05-12-2013, 01:51 AM)rowens Wrote: Crazy people that use crude violence give other crazy people a bad reputation.
But these guys didn't seem crazy before. That one guy had a decent looking girl that converted to Islam for him.
I can't even get a Christian girl to convert to Christianity for me.
to hell with her then! Thanks for reading!
Heart
