04-09-2013, 05:41 AM
"Cubicles
of wasted years
await me.
Lunchtime,
ham and cheese."
for me, that was the poem. I found the rest either confusing (why a white purple flower and where is it? and how does it absorb memories?) or cliche (the last 3 stanzas).
but that middle part made me smile. if I were you, I'd scrap the rest and develop that. good luck!
of wasted years
await me.
Lunchtime,
ham and cheese."
for me, that was the poem. I found the rest either confusing (why a white purple flower and where is it? and how does it absorb memories?) or cliche (the last 3 stanzas).
but that middle part made me smile. if I were you, I'd scrap the rest and develop that. good luck!
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.