Long Gone

[Volaticus]

. As Milo said the last line doesn't really work, you can't have multiple final overdoses.

I wouldn't give up on this piece, i would just change the last two lines. I like what you are trying to say in them, i really do.

This reminds me of my father and his relationship with his wife.

Thank you for taking time to read and comment.
I've put this poem on hold, but whenever I decide to revise it, I'll definitely think about and consider all the comments I've got.
Thanks again for the kind words and feedback.