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[Weeded]

Hi nice intro bye

[ellajam]

So glad to make your acquaintance, fare thee well.

[advocaite]

hello and good bye

[HAL-E Layne]

Hi, My name is Halley. I'm nineteen and from Indiana. I've been in a relationship for the past two years and its better than ever every day. I have 2 cockateils, 2 dogs, a cat and a spider. I have to many house plants and i love being out side in the woods. Writing has been something I've done since I was very young, it just never left me. I've never studied anywhere and i have no plans to go anytime soon. At the moment, I am focused on my path to enlightenment. I try to do yoga regularly and meditate also although i get less of that done. Well, thats me.

[ellajam]

Hi, Halley, welcome to the Pen

Just read some poems in the workshops and write some comments on what the strong and/or weak points seem to be for you and you're in.

If you'd like to read some critique tips you'll find them in the important threads of Novice.

Hope you enjoy the site, ella

[milo]

Hi, My name is Halley. I'm nineteen and from Indiana. I've been in a relationship for the past two years and its better than ever every day. I have 2 cockateils, 2 dogs, a cat and a spider. I have to many house plants and i love being out side in the woods. Writing has been something I've done since I was very young, it just never left me. I've never studied anywhere and i have no plans to go anytime soon. At the moment, I am focused on my path to enlightenment. I try to do yoga regularly and meditate also although i get less of that done. Well, thats me.

Do you like pina coladas or getting caught in the rain?

[Leanne]

I love it when teenagers refer to the days when they were "very young"

Welcome Halley. You can study poetry right here, and enlightenment is only a sonnet away.

[srijantje]

Hi,Halley,sounds good what'r you up to

[timgoodwin]

Greetings all and thanks for having me. I write and read a great deal of fantasy/fiction. Unpublished of course and really not such a pro at writing but I try. The poetry I write is relative to my stories and usually is of a rhyming nature. Oh no, he's a rhymer. Anyway, thanks for having me on board and I hope to get to know many of you in the future.

Tim

PS: I read mostly classic fantasy/fiction. Not so much sci-fi.





Just Be!

[ellajam]

Greetings all and thanks for having me. I write and read a great deal of fantasy/fiction. Unpublished of course and really not such a pro at writing but I try. The poetry I write is relative to my stories and usually is of a rhyming nature. Oh no, he's a rhymer. Anyway, thanks for having me on board and I hope to get to know many of you in the future.

Tim

PS: I read mostly classic fantasy/fiction. Not so much sci-fi.





Just Be!

Plenty of rhymers here, I hope you enjoy the site.

[timgoodwin]

Greetings all and thanks for having me. I write and read a great deal of fantasy/fiction. Unpublished of course and really not such a pro at writing but I try. The poetry I write is relative to my stories and usually is of a rhyming nature. Oh no, he's a rhymer. Anyway, thanks for having me on board and I hope to get to know many of you in the future.

Tim

PS: I read mostly classic fantasy/fiction. Not so much sci-fi.





Just Be!

Thank you and I look forward to it.

[kevinpaquet]

Hello there.

I'm Kevin, 24, Filipino/German from Davao. I'm a very frustrated poet. I used to write some stuff in my High School years back in 2007 and have just recently started writing again. My inspiration used to be my girlfriend, up to the point when she said she didn't like my creations and made an example of a piece that her ex wrote which she preferred more. Well, that sucked. A few months forward, our relationship has improved, but my writing has become much more stagnant. I haven't written anything since. Today, she called for a breakup or something... and so I decided to make use of the spare time I used to have for her and find some place to escape to online. And oh yeah, I'm wordy too. Sorry. I don't really know what to say. I guess I should just end it here.

[Severus Alexander]

Greetings, all! 

I am new to this website. Over the past few years, I have been a member of many other forums, similar to this. 

But, well, life is a journey, and journeys have a way of continuing. 

Paths diverge, come together, et cetra.

As such, I have come here. Henceforth, I will read, critique, and publish my poems on this site.

I look forward to the dawn of a new age.

[ellajam]

Greetings, all! 

I am new to this website. Over the past few years, I have been a member of many other forums, similar to this. 

But, well, life is a journey, and journeys have a way of continuing. 

Paths diverge, come together, et cetra.

As such, I have come here. Henceforth, I will read, critique, and publish my poems on this site.

I look forward to the dawn of a new age.

Hi, Severus, welcome to the Pen. I moved your post here, just click on each forum title to see what goes where. I hope you enjoy the site.

[Tiger the Lion]

Hi I am new to this site. Thank you for accepting my membership.
My poet name is Victoria Hunter

I am a disciplined poet, writing every day and study poetry lesson books every day.
I sit with piles of poetry books around me, even in bed, picking one to read every day.
first thing in the morning, i write. in my kitchen with the backdoor open,
nature sounds help to relax me, so I can write.
I am currently writing a complete collection of poems (just about done),
plus a book of poem on related to black people,
in natural environment, the black experience or portraits of black people.
(expect to be done by late spring)
I have attended several courses in poetry and have accomplished in poetry.
I recently graduated from a course in poetry, with a 96% grade point average.
I am bit of a perfectionist with my poems, so I am greedy for critique:0)
I love to create poems from letters and prose.  I find it, more comfortable.
I love to write poems with repetition, persona poems,
poems that instruct, when I am in the mood poems,
I love to write in the style of Emily Dickinson. I plan to somebody publish a book,
with all the poems in the style of Emily Dickinson. I have written a few already.
I am in love with personification:0) I also like to write strictly metaphor poems,
abstract, or focused image poems. At this point in my poetry life, If it is not a particular form,
I free write them as descriptive letters or descriptive prose first
I am seeking critique on all my work. I have no hang ups about critique,
only that I wish to be told why you feel something don't work.
I only recently got to know my own voice in writing. I never new it, just wrote.
Please feel free to critique my work:0)

My favorite poets are: Lucille Clifton, Ann Exton, Sharon Olds, Williams Carlos. I also like some Emily Dickinson and Wheats

Welcome Victoria. I find new members have one of two experiences here. They either run away saying "what a bunch of ignorant pigs" or stay and think "what a lucky little runt I am". The latter improve their poetry. 
Paul

[Leanne]

Good morning Victoria. Your posts must be accepted by the moderation team before they appear, and as the team consists of humans who live in all parts of the world, please be patient. We require three critiques that live up to the spirit of the forum. If you are not certain what sort of critique is acceptable, you will find this thread at the top of most forums and it's a good idea to check the individual forum rules also.

[ellajam]

Hi, Victoria, welcome to the Pen. Please try to keep your critiques for others specific to each piece rather than passing on general advice you've read, your first almost didn't get through.

I hope you enjoy the site, ella

[ellajam]

Can you please show me where i wasn't specific, in one poem please? I am usually always specific. I am going to review every critique I gave. I don't see how my critique was not specific enough. each line I critiqued I gave on them I suggested. I even complimented before I started. On my poem "fathers ghost" there are people going right to negative giving very heavy negative critique with smug attitudes and their critiques were allowed to go through. one say "means nothing" and the other say "just because you read poetry.."  Yet I am being told my critique almost did not go through, although their critique is pure negative.  I removed my poems because the critique were so unethical and not supported without any suggestions for improvements, other than punctuation. I posted in mild critique. That's what I gave. I was not trying to go line by line all the way down, that would be heavy critique.  What do you mean by get through?

Hi, Victoria, I was referring to the post below, your first. I've put the parts that seemed to be general advice in bold. Both critiques you followed up with were much more helpful and specific to the poem. Thank you for that.

EDIT: Oh, and by "got through" I meant that as it states in our welcome letter, the first three critiques are moderated. Once three are approved the registrant becomes a full member can post as they like freely and start their own threads.

My bold.

Hi I am new here.  Your imagery is quite lovely and I really enjoyed them.
I only feel a problem in the focus on subject.

I am going to give you some tips, that I recently got out of a practice of poetry book.
Poem begin where you enter a conversation, where the conversations is continued on your end.

My critique:
I personally feel your poem is two poems.
There is a really beautiful poem beginning at the word "while"
Every stanza after, would work well starting with the word "while"

Here are 3 tips that really helped me over this year

1. What ever your subject matter is, in the first stanza, you must comitt to it.
All else in the poem must support it.

2. Poems begin where you enter in a conversation.
you can imagine having a conversation with someone
and then what would you say, in reply on the subject that you are discussing.

3. It is easier often, to write your poem as a letter or prose first.
You free write it, being very descriptive.
Then you create a poem from the content in the letter.
This keeps you from ruining your natural turns in the poem within
I have started writing all my poem like this. I feel less frustrated.
Emily Dickinson used contend from her letters, and so did Ann Exton

4. a poem will chose its form.

Feel free to pass this information on:0)

[ellajam]

Hey from Ray,

He says he's working on a big project and won't allow the pigpen to distract him until he's finished it, a good ways into the future. He seems fine and happy with the work, Go Ray.

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey from Ray,

He says he's working on a big project and won't allow the pigpen to distract him until he's finished it, a good ways into the future. He seems fine and happy with the work, Go Ray.

Tell him we don't miss him. It'll bring him back sooner.