Night of yellow moon

[Semicircle]

Entrenched pine 
swaying limbs
road drips into
yellow moon


Roamed miles
from the campfire
following a 
balloon


Shadows weave like
bloody needles 
forest filled with
chittering beetles


Ears ringing
cold fuzz
I hope you
arrive soon.

[TranquillityBase]

Entrenched pine 
Swaying limbs
Road drips into
Yellow moon           my favorite lines


Shadows weave like
Bloody needles            why bloody?
Forest filled with
Chittering beetles


Simple line           not sure what this line refers to
Numb silence
I hope you
arrive soon.

Other than the lines I've noted, an effective mood piece.

[Xlateralus]

Someone is dying of an overdose. The poem needs something concrete to anchor it.

[Semicircle]

Thanks for the critiques TB and Xl. Hopefully that clarifies some loose ends.